2015年3月30日星期一

Kathy (Kaiyi Qian)
Dr. J. Marquardt
ENG 1430 W10
March 30, 2015
Retort

I’m of two minds about your clam that The Shawshank Redemption is not a kind of Cinderella story because there’s no identify item nor prince in the film. It’s true that there is no identify item and Prince in The Shawshank Redemption. But since Cinderella finish her transformation passively, she need a identify objects and Prince so that she can be the princess. However, the hero Andy in the film Shawshank finished his transformation by himself positively. Therefore the identify objects and Prince is not needed. If there must be a identify objects, the identify objects is the hammer he used to escape from prison because he finish his transformation through this object, which is similar with the function of the glass slipper in Cinderella story. They both help protagonist complete the transition to some degree. What’s more, the other elements in the film Shawshank conform to the elements of the type of Cinderella story. Therefore, the film, The Shawshank Redemption, is not a kind of Cinderella story.

2015年3月25日星期三

Project 2.2 Peer Review Worksheet
Editor’s Name: Kathy (Kaiyi Qian)
Writer’s Name: Carol (Wenbo Pan)
1)      Provide a brief paragraph-by-paragraph outline of your partner’s draft
Para 1: three elements in Cinderella’s story, villain, helper and transition. Summary the film Desert Flower
Para 3: Analyze element 2, helper in both story and film
Para 4: Analyze element 3, transition in both story and film
Para 5: Conclusion
2)      Any suggestions for improving this outline/organization?
In para 1, after summary the film Desert Flower, a brief element analyze of the film would be better.
3)      Identify any qualifying statements in the draft using a yellow highlighter. (How many did you find?) 
2
4)      Identify any rhetorical questions in the draft using a green highlighter. How many did you find? 
0
5)      Identify any inconsistencies in verb tense using a blue highlighter. How many did you find? 
10
6)      Identify areas that lack specificity using a pink highlighter. List what you found here.
   4
7)  Identify any problems in ordering information using an orange highlighter. Explain why the ordering is confusing. 
   0
8)  What is the most interesting part of the essay?
  Analyze the transition has psychological impact in the film, Desert Flower.
9)  What is the least interesting part of the essay?
   Analyses of the three elements in Cinderella story.
10) Provide a refutation for/argument against the essay. In what way(s) is this film NOT fit the definition of a Cinderella story?
There’s no identify object in the film.


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2015年3月5日星期四

Group 4
Dr. Marquardt
ENG1430
March 5, 2015
Summary of “Rhodopis”
Rhodopis is a story about a female Greek slave, this story told readers how slave Rhodopis became Egyptian Pharaoh’s wife. Rhodopis is actually a name of a young beautiful Greek courtesan, and she got married with an Egyptian Pharaoh. After her story was first recorded by the Greek historian Strabo in the 1st century BC, this story was widely spread around the word. And it is considered the earliest known variant of the "Cinderella" story.
Long ago in the land of Egypt, land of the green Nile, there lived a slave girl named Rhodopis. Rhodopis was born in Greece, who was sold to an Egyptian in a young age. One thing that makes her different from other slavery is that she is extremely beautiful. She has long golden curly hair and brown deep eyes. Other female slaves don’t want to be her friends and made her do all their work. Rhodopis only can make friends with animals.
One evening Rhodopis had more energy than usual when the day was done. Her master had fallen asleep under a tree near the river. She went down to the river near her animals, danced and sang so lightly. Then her master woke from his sleep and listened to her singing. He admired her dancing and felt that one so talented should not be without shoes. He ordered her a special pair of red slippers. After that, other servant girls teased Rhodopis even more because they were jealous of her beautiful red slippers.
A little while after this, the Pharaoh held a big party in Memphis and all in the kingdom were invited. Rhodopis wanted to dance in the party as well, but any other female slaves went to the party that night, so she had to stay at home and did extra work. That night Rhodopis was so sad that she began to sing out aloud to express her sadness. Her voice attracted a hippo so that hippo wanted to get closer to her, but the splashing of the water wet Rhodopis’s slippers. She took them off and put slippers under the sun to dry. At that time, a falcon flew down and snatched one of the slippers. However, Rhodopis was in awe because she knew it was the God Horus who had taken her shoes. And the left slipper was thrown in the Pharaoh’s chariot. Pharaoh thought that was God Horus’s sign. So he kept the slipper. In order to find the owner of this slipper, Pharaoh asked all women in the kingdom to try to put on this slipper, the one who fit the slipper best is the women who he looked for.
Finally, people find out that no other women can fit in this slipper expect Rhodopis. Then the pharaoh married Rhodopis.
This story was written in the 1st century BC, so there are some terms that readers may not totally understand. Such as “pharaoh”, pharaoh is a title of an ancient Egyptian king. “Courtesan” is a prostitute, especially one associating with noblemen or men of wealth. And her name “Rhodopis” means one’s face like a rose, and other strange thing is that the slipper that master gave her is also red, there may exist some connections.
Works Cited
"Egyptian Cinderella -- Rhodopis." ArticleSnatch Article Directory. N.p., n.d. Web. 05 Mar. 2015.